Son of a Pitch Round One

In 1899 South America Peru’s Adrianna Salazar is the rightful queen, and considered a thief to the throne despite being the sole surviving heir. Battling daily against the feud with her Bolivian cousins to protect her crown against the feud with her Bolivian cousin her cousins’ threats leave their calling in her home, and forcing her to flee to her fiancé Marcelo, Brazil’s future king. Too bad Marcelo doesn’t want her.

While her ladies scheme romance between her and the prince, Adrianna’s feelings blossom for Rafael, Marcelo’s older illegitimate brother. To make court more interesting, Adrianna begins receiving mysterious notes in her room from someone called The Loyal Guard warning her of danger. As strange incidents with corpses are found around court threatening the alliance, Adrianna relies on Rafael, but he’s hiding dangerous secrets of his own. Her heart should lie with Marcelo, but her trust and love lie with Rafael.

As she receives news of Bolivia’s desire to begin a revolution, and the religious war dividing her people Adrianna knows there’s no time to waste. She needs her ladies plan to work fast because Peruvia will cease to exist without her. If she can’t put aside her feelings for Rafael and secure the alliance with Brasilia her entire reign will be in jeopardy. As Adrianna and Marcelo begin to align as rulers the castle seer warns of a danger she’s not sure she’ll overcome.

BRASILIA’S COURT OF BLOOD AND LIES is an alternate historical fantasy complete at 77,000 words. As a Latina interested in historical fiction and fantasy, I wrote this book because historical fiction always takes place in Europe.

Thank you for taking the time to consider my work.







First 250

She was raised to conquer her cousin’s country ending the reign of terror, but failed.

A humid breeze brought the stench of burning corpses to the balcony as she leaned against the silver-plated rail, gazing across her homeland. The fields used to have deep green color, and it didn’t seem coincidence that the King’s death seventeen years prior made the beautiful shades of green a muggy grey with no life sprouting from the ground. A death with the stench of burning corpses wafting on the humid air.

Torture happened to her people on a monthly basis. The events the night before left their marks. The border military stationed miles from the palace stood straight in a single line, protecting their country as if their lives. In front of the militia, commoners threw the officers angered expressions while tossing limbs of the fallen soldiers into the bright orange flames, and ducked as the embers of the flames rose from the new content.

She turned from the balcony, and strode to the wooden trunk at the end of her bed. She bent down, and lifted the heavy bronze lock turning the key until it made the smallest click, and opened it. She lifted the lid, regarding the contents borrowed from the night guards; a sword, a bow and arrow, and an ax. She bent her head over the chest. Her long, curly black hair and tan skin reflected off the sword’s sheen as she gently moved it aside.

“Despite what the council thinks I will never be known as weak,” she whispered. 

CampNaNoWriMo Winner!

So this happened today!

I always wanted to do CampNaNoWriMo, but I've always been too busy with summer school to do it. I drafted 40,000 words of the sequel to my middle grade series. I'm going to let this sit for three weeks before I plunge into the editing.

Camp NaNoWriMo

I've decided to take the plunge, and try do CampNaNoWriMo. For those who don't know it takes place during July, and sometimes April in which you set your own word count goal. Normally during November you have to hit 50,000 words. Some writers don't do it because November is hectic with the holiday season.

I'm going to write the sequel to the middle grade series I hope to get an agent for. It's an idea I've been brewing in my head, but the agents I've been following said they are looking for a middle grade series. So by writing this sequel it will let me know if it's possible.

Angela Quarles 7 Steps to Revising Your NaNoWriMo Story

So a USA Today Bestselling author who is also a participant of NaNoWriMo. Her 2010 NaNoWriMo story became a bestseller. These are her tips for revising her NaNoWriMo stories.

1. Read it through in its entirety, but don’t get hung up on nitpick-y editing. At this stage I’m looking to see what the heck I’ve written and make notes of any changes I’d need to make. Some of these are big-picture thoughts I write in the Notes section for that scene in Scrivener, or it’s a footnote I’ve added to a word or sentence. 

At this point, I’m only concentrating on the big picture—the bones of the story. This is the Emergency Room stage—your story is bleeding, the plot has so many holes, or is missing an entire limb, and so you should only be figuring out what the massive wounds might be and how to fix them. Don’t worry about the small cuts. Not yet. Resist.

2. As I’m going through, I also write down a short summary of each scene in the Synopsis “card” in Scrivener.

3. Once done, I go back through each “card” and make sure that the scene has a goal, motivation, and conflict, or if it’s a sequel scene or transition scene, I make note of that and see what might need to be added. This is a final check to make sure I haven’t missed some important story bones.

4. I then take a deep breath and see if I can write down a 25-30 word or less “logline”. If I can’t succinctly capture the protagonist, their goal, and the conflict, while also getting across the tone and genre, I know my story could be in trouble. 

Some of you plotters might have already done this before you even started writing—make sure it still applies!

5. If I’m really having trouble seeing the “shape” of the story, I print out the scene synopses and make notes on there, marking and shifting things around. It’s essential to find some way of seeing your story as a whole, instead of getting mired down in the words. Believe me, that’s a quick way to feel like you’re drowning in revisions, unable to get a grasp of what needs to be done.

6. Once I’ve let all this marinate and plugged in all the notes where they could be tackled in Scrivener, I start revising. But, I don’t do it by starting from the beginning and editing and changing as I go. I only dip into the parts of the story that I marked during the read through. This keeps me focused on the big picture. It also has the added benefit of preventing story fatigue. 

I’ve found that the fewer times I have to read the story, the fresher it stays and the less of a chance I get sick of it by the time I’m ready to publish. The scene synopses help at this stage to keep me oriented so I don’t have to reread each scene.

7. Then I read it again, smoothing out the patches as I go, and hand it off to my Alpha reader.

After that, it goes through what I’d call edits, instead of revisions, and that’s a different tactic. But I do another revision pass after it comes back from the Alpha reader (again only dipping into the parts that need fixing). 

Next, it goes to the developmental editor I’ve hired in the past. Then I use a color-coding highlighting system to help me self-edit—this is basically my own line editing pass. Then it goes to my Beta readers, then to my line editor/copy editor. I incorporate changes, and then hand it off to two separate proofreaders before I’m ready to format and publish.

But, as I said earlier, I didn’t have all this in place when I first started. So if you don’t have a critique group or Alpha and Beta readers, don’t despair. ForBreeches, I participated in several forums and used a ton of Beta readers until I found ones that were solid. I also found places like critiquecircle.com extremely helpful in learning and honing my craft. Many people read chapters (or the whole story) there and helped me get it into shape.

How you handle revisions will be depend on how you think and perhaps how you drafted—are you a plotter or a pantser?—so have patience as you learn what works for you. The important thing to keep in mind:

Take it in stages, working from big fixes down to small fixes.

There is no sense in fine-tuning the cadence of a sentence in the opening scene, getting it just perfect, and then realizing that the whole first scene needs to go because it doesn’t do what you need it to do for the sake of your story.